Caligula's Launderette

I have to say I like it. and niteowl it is poetry. the reason I am giving it 3 stars is that it leaves the reader wondering "what?" you might ...

this was such a beautiful poem. I really don't have much to say but..."Wow!" keep up the fantastic work. CL

here's a more polished product...thanks all for the reviews. CL ---------------------------------------------------------------------- It’s a Sunday Morning death parade With its monatomic rumblings

I like it. To me the choppiness adds to the raw (emotion) feel of the piece. keep it up. CL

I think it has to do writing style. Salvadore, I read some of his but not his writing style is not particulary a favorite of mine. CL

The Tree of Life sprouted above him majestically, the blanched white limbs reaching out from it source, spreading the Dima. Placing a weathered hand on the sacred bark, he felt ...

Prologue September 3rd, 1893 Out of this ugliness may come, Some day, so beautiful a flower, That men will wonder at that hour, Remembering smoke and flowerless slum, And ask--glimpsing ...

thank you muchly dears. Yes I am new. I am think about putting the speaker's name in parenthesis in front of the paragraph, so you know whose thinking, but I'm ...

it's not finished, its far from it, but I thought I'd post what I had so far. The narrator changes throughout the story, so if you have any problems with ...

this is the second in a series of I Love You poems. This one is from the point of view of Dan about Maria(pronounced Mariah), this is in league with ...

to go along with me short story Walk with me which I'll post soon. This is from the view of Maria (pronounced Mariah) to Dan. And it's layout, formatting is ...

thanks alot. Wow...I hadn't realized how many typos I'd missed. I will be working on those pronto. Thanks again. cheers CL

this is only the begging I've a lot to work on this but enjoy. CL Slaying the Dreamer I'm a priest for the poorest sacrifice I'm but a raft in ...

with 'it' I was refering to life was for him and how it never changed. that sort of thing. CL 8)

its still poetry. To change the subject slightly I like this poem, and I think the profanity worked well with the emotion quality. well written too, I could see everything ...